Poetry - Page 2

Rndm_Perfection · 10-16-2003, 08:58 AM

It was based on Norse Mythology, as was the game... so it was easy to use the art from the game.

Some of the stuff mentioned in the poem is not in the game.

thatmariolover · 10-24-2003, 12:34 PM

Man, those are good poems. I feel kind of embarassed posting my own... But... Well, I may as well. I have a couple others, but they don't really suit my mood.

Keep in mind, I wrote this a couple days ago and my girlfriend just dumped me (we were incredibly attatched emotionally). So, if this is pessimistic, well... Forgive me

Or Either
________

Climbing up a ladder
with no end
and no beginning.
Floating down a river
with no paddle
and no shore.
Speckled with the scars
earned at the crossroads
of life's travels;
my trophies of the pains
I never knew
I would endure.
And through the sadness,
through the pain,
I struggle with a question.
Is life worthwhile
for the trip,
or for the destination?
.
.
.
Or Either?

Ace195 · 10-24-2003, 12:57 PM

Dude that doesn't suck int he least you should post that on poetry.com

thatmariolover · 10-24-2003, 01:06 PM

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Originally Posted by Ace195

Dude that doesn't suck int he least you should post that on poetry.com

I started this poem two months ago and never liked the ending, but I sent it off to poetry.com and got published anyway (both book and audio).

However: The copy I sent to poetry.com was never what I wanted the poem to be. So I changed the last 3/4 of it a few days ago and now I like it a lot better.

Rndm_Perfection · 10-24-2003, 03:21 PM

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Originally Posted by thatmariolover

I started this poem two months ago and never liked the ending, but I sent it off to poetry.com and got published anyway (both book and audio).

However: The copy I sent to poetry.com was never what I wanted the poem to be. So I changed the last 3/4 of it a few days ago and now I like it a lot better.

Whosa whatsa? Audio copy at poetry.com?

thatmariolover · 10-24-2003, 03:25 PM

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Originally Posted by Rndm_Perfection

Whosa whatsa? Audio copy at poetry.com?

A select number of the poems they recieve are chosen to be read by "professional poetry readers" and are recorded. The CD can then be purchased along with the book (I didn't buy either).

Vampyr · 11-03-2003, 10:19 PM

I was feeling depressed so I wrote this sonnett. I produced this thing in like 10 minutes, so its not that good. I was hoping that you guys could give me some advice and help me critique it. Possibly come with a better title, because I suck at titles.

Love's Last Testimony

The red rose has bloomed and died,
Sapphire orbs of eyes that once were mine.
The crimson dove has flown and dived,
Hair of Angels, touched by me, never mine.

A Heaven of love that used to burn,
Now a Hell of loss that freezes and numbs.
What was I supposed to learn?
That it never should have begun?

My heart is screaming for you,
But you won’t answer back.
You have painted my soul blue,
Because it’s you that I lack.

I wait as the dew waits for the sun,
Will this Hell never be done?

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Good? Bad? Ugly? Give me your opinion.

Ace195 · 11-03-2003, 10:23 PM

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Originally Posted by Vampyr

I was feeling depressed so I wrote this sonnett. I produced this thing in like 10 minutes, so its not that good. I was hoping that you guys could give me some advice and help me critique it. Possibly come with a better title, because I suck at titles.

Hell is Cold

The red rose has bloomed and died,
Sapphire orbs of eyes that once were mine.
The crimson dove has flown and dived,
Hair of Angels, touched by me, never mine.

A Heaven of love that used to burn,
Now a Hell of loss that freezes and numbs.
What was I supposed to learn?
That it never should have begun?

My heart is screaming for you,
But you won’t answer back.
You have painted my soul blue,
Because it’s you that I lack.

I wait as the dew waits for the sun,
Will this Hell never be done?

~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~

Good? Bad? Ugly? Give me your opinion.

:zombie: It's

good

.. Nah I'm just playing it's really good.. Who did you write it about.

Vampyr · 11-03-2003, 10:26 PM

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Originally Posted by Ace

Nah I'm just playing it's really good.. Who did you write it about.

Glad you liked it.

Or at least I think you did. lol.

I wrote it about my ex who dumped me a couple weeks ago and I still havnt gotten over. But writting things like this helps.

Ace195 · 11-03-2003, 10:29 PM

Yeah I agree trying to breathe was about a girl named Kati.. Hero2's cousin that I had the biggest crush on for the longest time but she's engaged now.

Dylflon · 11-03-2003, 10:29 PM

Vampyr has been ultra mopey lately. I've been trying to cheer him up to no avail. Actually, it's more like I was yelling at him for not being happy. I will win Vampyr, mark my words.

Vampyr · 11-03-2003, 10:34 PM

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Originally Posted by Ace

Yeah I agree trying to breathe was about a girl named Kati.. Hero2's cousin that I had the biggest crush on for the longest time but she's engaged now.

Sorry to hear that, Ace. But poetry helps, even though Im not very good at it. (Stories are more of my thing). I actually have an idea for another Sonnet. I will write it tomorrow, maybe.

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Vampyr has been ultra mopey lately. I've been trying to cheer him up to no avail. Actually, it's more like I was yelling at him for not being happy. I will win Vampyr, mark my words.

Glad to hear that, Dyflon. If you win, thats all the better for me.

But I'm playing another game, with someone else.

A game of love.

And I plan to win!