Re: A poem for a girl...
To the original poem:
I likey. It's rare when free verse has a good rhythm.
The vocabulary is excellent. And, Ace, ladies that would have any chance of being 'woo'ed by poetry can handle large words (and actually prefer them).
There are two types of poems, as I see it. Those that are written for entertainment, and those that are written for the self. I feel the poems for the self are more entertaining... especially those from people I know.
Anywho, this is a poem for the self. You wrote this for you... Sure, you posted it for others to see, but that doesn't change the meaning of the poem. It's personal. It's beautiful.
Perhaps I'll share some of mine with you some day. I write in meter though... I'd like to find an effective way to just write free. Maybe I'm too structured and predictable, heh.
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As I climb onto your back, I will promise not to sting.
I will tell you what you want to hear and not mean anything.
As I treat you like a dog, and I shoot my venom in,
You pretend you never knew that I am a scorpion.
12 AM EDT Weds May 25, 2005
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