A poem for a girl...

[Crash]

Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I like your boobs
now why dont we screw



(that'll woo her for sure!)

but your poem, i love it... the ending 4 lines are kinda outta place it seems... that's just me, the rest of you may love it...I love the beginning and middle... absolutely great!!!

[Yugi Starwind]

Well, i'll tell you this. That's better than anything I can do.

[dropCGCF]

Originally Posted by Crash

Roses are red,
Violets are blue,
I like your boobs
now why dont we screw



(that'll woo her for sure!)

but your poem, i love it... the ending 4 lines are kinda outta place it seems... that's just me, the rest of you may love it...I love the beginning and middle... absolutely great!!!

Then you can take her out to an expensive restaraunt (like Burger King) and order her something expensive (like something off of the dollar menu).

[Neo]

I'm just going to improvise to the lullaby of "Go to sleep"

You're a girl...
Your hair swirls..
I'd like to get to know you..

Come with me,
Have some tea,
And fill my heart with glee!

I like your eyes...
They look like flies...
I think I might just cry...

You're so tall,
Suck my b- uhh...
I'll wait for you to call!

[Stray_Bullet]

To the original poem:
I likey. It's rare when free verse has a good rhythm.

The vocabulary is excellent. And, Ace, ladies that would have any chance of being 'woo'ed by poetry can handle large words (and actually prefer them).

There are two types of poems, as I see it. Those that are written for entertainment, and those that are written for the self. I feel the poems for the self are more entertaining... especially those from people I know.

Anywho, this is a poem for the self. You wrote this for you... Sure, you posted it for others to see, but that doesn't change the meaning of the poem. It's personal. It's beautiful.

Perhaps I'll share some of mine with you some day. I write in meter though... I'd like to find an effective way to just write free. Maybe I'm too structured and predictable, heh.