09-03-2003, 11:08 PM
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Re: Battle Royale Part6
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Originally Posted by Ginkasa
What was with the switching from the narrarator to a character's thoughts mid paragraph with no notice? A better way to show what the character is thinking, without showing the characters thoughts word for word, would be to show their reaction from their thought...
Example:
Rndm's eyes widened as he realized that Vampyr was wearing body armor.
Something like that.
*shrugs and walks away*
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