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Originally Posted by Ginkasa
doesn’t have any horse or protection or even food.
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The only problem I have is you did that several times in your story. It's technically grammatically incorrect to do that, but some writers still do. I think it would sound better as:
"...doesn't have a horse, protection, or even any food."
Err... Just a suggestion.
Sorry, it's the evil school that made me do it!
Other than that, it was kinda cool. Nothing like death and destruction to start off my morning.