I don't think you should have done that either. You say you want to add mystery and suspense, but telling us who has died, whether you directly telling us or a character in the story telling us, takes most, if not all, of that suspense out.
It is much more suspenseful to watch a singal character wander through a dense jungle, clutching some poor weapon, nervously looking around for any movment, any sign of an attacker. He doesn't know who's still alive, who is near him, or anything.
That would be much better than, first, knowing all the characters who are alive or dead, and second, writing a scene like that only with much less build-up or suspense.
*shrugs and walks away*
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