Poetry: Part 2

[The Germanator]

Originally Posted by Typhoid

Someones already probably done this but, here goes. Now i have to let you know that i poured my heart and soul into this....This Poem is entitled

Love Bytes

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Please be gentile when reading that. It means alot to me.

Interesting structure. What made you decide to end all lines with syntactic pauses? It creates a more formal balance, which is one way to go. I question the rhyme scheme though. If you are going with the more formal regularity that I mentioned above, it would be nice to see the rhyme scheme stay more consistent and true. I suppose you may have been mixing in some free verse, which can be done well if used effectively. I'm not sure that you did it perfectly, but I applaud the effort to infuse it.