I'm a nervous psychopath with a gun. AWESOME!
This one was quite good. We are beginning to see some interesting character development that goes a bit deeper than previous stories/chapters, especially with Atomus. I did notice a few minor errors:
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The rest of the group catches up and stops once they reach them struggling to catch their breath.
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I think "them" was ment to be "him."
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She seems consoled by Atomus just being beside him.
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"Him" should be "her".
I think that was all. Other than that, superb job.