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Originally Posted by Vampyr
The girl spoke, “I am EDEN.”
Thus the first chapter ends. I havnt started to use any of the one word descriptions yet, but this is an introduction. How was it?
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It was great. Its really well written for being of the short story nature. It's better than Dyflons for many reasons one being it's not BASED ON A MOVIE as I can tell yet anyways. And two the intro is interesting IE the green "blood" oozing from wounds. Great intro. Ooh. and there is a 3 you almost pleased Ginkasa