It's acctually a half-eay decent poem.. IMO, It just yeah... are you sure you've never read Robert Frost's "The Road Not Taken?"
Anyhow, yeah, there's some nice imagery in there, but not enough continuinty... it jumps. There's minimal emotion in the beginning, and it doesn't develop it only comes... I'm having trouble assossiating the last line with the rest of the poem.
I did enjoy reading it, however, maybe you should revise it.
(BTW: I tend to be overly critical)
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