Thanks Xantar! Great critique!
I see now that I made a few stupid mistakes, but I guess we use a lot more commas in Dutch...
I know/knew the difference between it's and its, but those people here confused me so I made their mistake.
And I think I'll print some of your fanfics soon, when I'm not really busy. I don't like reading things from a screen.
Oh yeah, I know it's pretty short, but Ric thought I could get some doubloons for it anyway... Not sure if I'm gonna continue it, I don't really like writing fanfics, I prefer creating my own story. Or a story in Middle-Earth would be nice...
Another thing, I'm gonna post a thing about Elves/Dwarves/Men, perhaps you could look into it to correct me, it's for school and I could use a good note.