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Re: Quick, does this sentence make sense?
Old 06-15-2006, 12:04 AM   #2
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Default Re: Quick, does this sentence make sense?

It would be better to reverse the fragments. The first fragment is much too long so it sounds a little funny. This is how I would write it.

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I look forward to speaking with you soon, as I am eager to share how my excellent problem-solving skills and leadership potential will benefit SHCC.
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