Well now I'm done with chapter 1...
Same problems as before with the quotes and the dialgoue but I guess you would since you wrote it before anyone else read it....
Well there are some minor errors in these chapter.. like the use of a pronoun that doesn't fit anyone in the first paragraph.....
The chapter isn't half bad but now it seems like the prologue was more of chapter 1 then it was a prologue since the story picks up right after it.....
We get the first trace of a plot in these chapter also....
And you need to be a tad more descriptive....
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Dyne on Canada's favorite pasttime,
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I loved ramming into animals as they ran away
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