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Neo 06-14-2006 09:51 PM

Quick, does this sentence make sense?
 
Eager to share with you how my excellent problem-solving skills and leadership potential can benefit SHCC, I look forward to speaking with you soon.

Dyne 06-15-2006 12:04 AM

Re: Quick, does this sentence make sense?
 
It would be better to reverse the fragments. The first fragment is much too long so it sounds a little funny. This is how I would write it.

Quote:

I look forward to speaking with you soon, as I am eager to share how my excellent problem-solving skills and leadership potential will benefit SHCC.

Neo 06-15-2006 12:21 AM

Re: Quick, does this sentence make sense?
 
Good call

Bond 06-15-2006 02:21 AM

Re: Quick, does this sentence make sense?
 
I hate drama.

GameMaster 06-15-2006 03:55 AM

Re: Quick, does this sentence make sense?
 
I yearn with excitement at the prospect of speaking with you, as doing so will allow me the privilege to prove worthy my ability to problem solve and demonstrate admirable leadership skills.


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