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Vampyr
07-16-2004, 01:53 PM
Hey guys, I'm submitting this letter to NP, and I want someone to proofread it. I want to make sure it is mistake/error free, including spelling, grammar, and word usage. It's not too long, so it shouldnt be a real big deal.

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Dear Nintendo Power Readers,

I've been a subscriber to Nintendo Power for a very long time, for over seven years in fact. I've seen the metaphorical fires and rain in Nintendo Power's history. I watched in awe as Golden Eye 007 climbed to the top of the charts, and refused to let go. I felt my heart jump and twitch when I first ran my fingers down the laminated cover of the Ocarina of Time issue. I let my eyes be gilded by the fiery words inside each issue, watching as the text immortalized my childhood in it's pages. My mind was utterly captivated by everything this magazine gave me, but none so much as the Player's Pulse section. Within it's hallowed columns I was able to read what my fellow gamer had to say. I didn't own a computer, so the Player's Pulse section was my portal into the minds and opinions of people who loved the same thing I did: games.

But lately I have begun to notice something that both shocks and shames me. The quality of these letters submitted to Player's Pulse has slowely but surely declined. It's nearly impossible to find a letter that doesn't include the brackets, "[ ]", where the Nintendo Power editors had to fill in words or even entire phrases that the original writer forgot to include. The letters that I read in today's magazine disgusts me. These letters represent the entire gaming community, yet it appears that a five year old is composing them on a 1st grade writing level. If I'm going to be represented in a magazine, in front of the entire world, I want to be portrayed intelligently. With today's technology, there is no excuse for these pitiful skeletons of a letter, and my fellow gamer has no right to degrade the entire community in whis way. These terrible letters hurt the reputation of gamers, and totally discredit anything that the writter has written. If they can't even manage to write a letter properly, why should I believe anything they are writing about, or even take it seriously? Not only this, but they are giving evidence to the terrible stereotype that gamers are lazy and do badly in school, because they "rot their brains." This is my call to action to everyone who reads and writes to Nintendo Power: Take time when you write your letters. Proofread them, and have someone else read it before you submit it. It's not too late to gain back the respect you have managed to so easily lose. The next time you decide to take the weight of the entire gaming community's opinion on your shoulders, live up to the task, or don't do it at all.

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I realize it's probably too long to be accepted, but I dont care.

ulala06
07-16-2004, 02:19 PM
wow man, how often do you SEE nintendo power??? because i think you guys are more than just friends...


:D


nothing really stuck out grammar-wise.

Swan
07-16-2004, 02:59 PM
I could only find two. Sorry if I missed some. I wasn't really looking.


Dear Nintendo Power Readers,

I've been a subscriber to Nintendo Power for a very long time, for over seven years in fact. I've seen the metaphorical fires and rain in Nintendo Power's history. I watched in awe as Golden Eye 007 climbed to the top of the charts, and refused to let go. I felt my heart jump and twitch when I first ran my fingers down the laminated cover of the Ocarina of Time issue. I let my eyes be gilded by the fiery words inside each issue, watching as the text immortalized my childhood in it's pages. My mind was utterly captivated by everything this magazine gave me, but none so much as the Player's Pulse section. Within it's hallowed columns I was able to read what my fellow gamer had to say. I didn't own a computer, so the Player's Pulse section was my portal into the minds and opinions of people who loved the same thing I did: games.

But lately I have begun to notice something that both shocks and shames me. The quality of these letters submitted to Player's Pulse has slowly but surely declined. It's nearly impossible to find a letter that doesn't include the brackets, "[ ]", where the Nintendo Power editors had to fill in words or even entire phrases that the original writer forgot to include. The letters that I read in today's magazine disgusts me. These letters represent the entire gaming community, yet it appears that a five year old is composing them on a 1st grade writing level. If I'm going to be represented in a magazine, in front of the entire world, I want to be portrayed intelligently. With today's technology, there is no excuse for these pitiful skeletons of a letter, and my fellow gamer has no right to degrade the entire community in this way. These terrible letters hurt the reputation of gamers, and totally discredit anything that the writter has written. If they can't even manage to write a letter properly, why should I believe anything they are writing about, or even take it seriously? Not only this, but they are giving evidence to the terrible stereotype that gamers are lazy and do badly in school, because they "rot their brains." This is my call to action to everyone who reads and writes to Nintendo Power: Take time when you write your letters. Proofread them, and have someone else read it before you submit it. It's not too late to gain back the respect you have managed to so easily lose. The next time you decide to take the weight of the entire gaming community's opinion on your shoulders, live up to the task, or don't do it at all.

Canyarion
07-16-2004, 05:39 PM
The letters that I read in today's magazine disgust[NO 's'] me.

I want to be portrayed intelligently [you might want to rephrase that, it took some time before I understood]

and totally discredit anything that the writ[NO 't']er has written. [writer and written in 1 sentence isn't pretty... perhaps 'writer has composed'?]

and writes to Nintendo Power: [no capital 'T'?]ake time when you write your letters.

you have managed to lose so easily. ['so easily' after 'to lose'?]



About you opinion: :roll: but letting somebody else proofread it for you might be a bit to much... you could say 'and perhaps have someone else read it before you submit it.'

:)

Canyarion
07-20-2004, 09:46 AM
So what did you do? Were we helpful?

GameMaster
07-20-2004, 01:31 PM
So what did you do? Were we helpful?

I think he's on vacation.

Canyarion
07-20-2004, 01:45 PM
He left without me? :mad:

Dylflon
07-20-2004, 01:57 PM
Yeah, Nintendo Power pisses me off. It's just not a good magazine anymore. All the letters are from little kids and the sections that give you game previews are less text and more pictures.

Nintendo Power used to cater to a larger audience but now seems only to aim at the 5-11 year old demographic. It disgusts me.

I love OPM (official playstation magazine) though. It's aimed at teenagers and adults. It's a good magazine. Although it used to be a lot longer (averaging from 150-180 pages long) it now is almost always just above 120 pages. Also, there are a lot more ads than there used to be.

Dyne
07-20-2004, 03:50 PM
All the posters lately have been lame. Stupid Licencing crap. Give me Nintendo posters, not multi-platform game posters. Like, I just got Spiderman 2. I would have much preferred a Four Swords poster. Or a Tales of Symphonia poster. These are all going up on my wall; I want posters of games I like. And everyone likes.

I also agree with your opinion. The brackets are stupid.

I still enjoy it as a magazine though.

Jason1
07-20-2004, 04:47 PM
I totally agree with that letter, but there is no way NP would ever put a letter than inteligent, and well written, in their magazine.

gekko
07-20-2004, 05:36 PM
I've gotten published by Nintendo Power before. They re-write almost the entire letter, taking out a large portion and even adding some of their own words to it. They want to get the point across in the smallest amount of space.

Canyarion
07-20-2004, 06:33 PM
I think they published mine once... but it didn't look like it at all and they even changed my name into something completely different. :unsure:

ZebraRampage
07-20-2004, 06:43 PM
Within it's hallowed columns I was able to read what my fellow gamer had to say. I didn't own a computer, so the Player's Pulse section was my portal into the minds and opinions of people who loved the same thing I did: games.



I guess that gamer should be gamers to fit with the context of the sentence.

Dyne
07-20-2004, 08:18 PM
I've gotten published by Nintendo Power before. They re-write almost the entire letter, taking out a large portion and even adding some of their own words to it. They want to get the point across in the smallest amount of space.


Which issue/letter?

gekko
07-22-2004, 10:26 AM
Eek. Umm... try like April 2000, letter about DigiPen.

Not sure on the issue, and don't have my Nintendo Power magazines to search. Find a letter by Brian Ehlert via Internet.

Vampyr
07-25-2004, 08:37 AM
Ok guys, I'm back from my week long stay at the University of Kentucky. (much fun was had, and many girls were flirted with.)

I want to say thanks to everyone who helped me out on editing it, and I'm going to change the things you mentioned, then send it in, and we'll see what happens.

I might try to find your letter later, Gekko.

+reps are also being handed out