Poem

[Angrist]

As I walk in the night,
the road reveals itself before me.
Silently I follow without question,
until the road splits in two.
To the left is a road I've known all my life,
To the right is a road I've never seen before.

As I take the left,
I notice something isn't right.
Things are not as they should be,
The world once so familiar is changing before my eyes.
I feel the urge to turn around,
but am afraid to do so.

As I look back,
the road I just walked on is not there.
Not knowing what is happening,
I feel an ancient fear come up in my heart.
Terror seizes me and my head begins to spin,
yet I've always known this would happen.

Now I am lost in space. time. dimensions.
I keep on walking, hoping to ever come home again.
But deep in my heart I know I won't.

I need love desperately.


SKM. 12-12-'02

[GameMaster]

1. Similiar to Robert Frost's Two Path/Road poem

2. Who's initials are SKM?

3. Is it you that needs love desperately? If so, its not true, you're just being manipulated by the system and society. You must fight it. Remain alone.

[Angrist]

1. Could be, never read it. Probably better though.
2. Mine.
3. I just felt like that yesterday evening. Nice end to the thing.

4. I never make poems... I was just inspirered by something.

[Happydude]

1.your gay :p
2.pfft
3.HAHA
4.there was no question for that answer
5.jk :p


good luck with the love finding...or whatever...;)

[Angrist]

I don't need love desperately! :mad: It's just part of the poem! Am I lost in space?? NO! :rolleyes:

[Destro]

That was boring. Dutch poetry, go figure.

[BlueFire]

Originally posted by happydude666
1.your gay :p
I'll have to agree.

5.jk :p
I'll have to disagree

[Angrist]

Hmpf just wanted to share it with you.

I'm not gay. Far from it.

[Destro]

He isn't gay. Like I said, he's Dutch.

[GameMaster]

Leave Angrist alone FreakyBob/Doctor Zhivago.

[Joeiss]

He isn't gay. He just blows loads every time he looks at a female.


And I agree with BF.

[bobcat]

This is too funny :rofl:

But that's an interesting poem. I don't know much about poems, but I think I get wot ur getting at.

Is there a wombat in your poem? If there is follow the wombat, he'll lead you to the light :unsure:

[Mushlafa]

yeah guys lay off of angrist :p... anyway.. its 3:30 and im lazy to read the poem... gnight

[Kitana85]

It's acctually a half-eay decent poem.. IMO, It just yeah... are you sure you've never read Robert Frost's "The Road Not Taken?"
Anyhow, yeah, there's some nice imagery in there, but not enough continuinty... it jumps. There's minimal emotion in the beginning, and it doesn't develop it only comes... I'm having trouble assossiating the last line with the rest of the poem.

I did enjoy reading it, however, maybe you should revise it.


(BTW: I tend to be overly critical)

[bobcat]

Originally posted by Kitana85
It's acctually a half-eay decent poem.. IMO, It just yeah... are you sure you've never read Robert Frost's "The Road Not Taken?"
Anyhow, yeah, there's some nice imagery in there, but not enough continuinty... it jumps. There's minimal emotion in the beginning, and it doesn't develop it only comes... I'm having trouble assossiating the last line with the rest of the poem.

I did enjoy reading it, however, maybe you should revise it.


(BTW: I tend to be overly critical)
lol there's your poem critic :D

[Angrist]

K thanks. I guess I won't go into writing poems.

Funny though, it took me half an hour to make.
I was walking the dog at 11:30. It was dark and came to the t-joint. I usually take the left. But I felt uncomfortable there...
Then I thought of Disney's Alice in Wonderland. Where some weird dog erases the road and Alice is left alone in the dark.

After that I thought of a punch-line to make the link to reality...

Bleh :unsure:

:D :rolleyes:

Thanks for the critic.

[Andromida_]

I thought it was a good poem :)
Good Job